tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2265659668411443893.post7149051280831111060..comments2023-11-02T02:20:42.056-07:00Comments on The Ephemeral Frontier: A Deadwood story -- consequences, part 4Diohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14266713613721430111noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2265659668411443893.post-28512462262993482902009-10-09T10:15:00.187-07:002009-10-09T10:15:00.187-07:00Hey HB,
I think we meant the same thing--you'...Hey HB, <br /><br />I think we meant the same thing--you're simply expressing it it more clearly than I did. <br /><br />I did want to make him more human, I just was hoping that including granny wasn't too much of a sentimental cliche. (though she also had another more diabolical purpose--Dio's disguise worked that much better because it carried with some comforting emotional associations in Zed's mind). <br /><br />I also tried to make him human in other ways--the indulgence of the little bag of candies, and the look of the avatar itself--note that he is a fresh-faced pleasant-looking kid--not your standard issue grizzled, snarling ruffian.<br /><br />The key thing I am going to be shooting for in this all of this is your point about Zed being "a real man with people who would mourn his loss"--which hopefully will eventually include the reader to some extent. I am looking at this whole storyline not as an adventure, but as a tragedy, with the actual scope of the tragedy unfolding bit by bit.<br /><br />**********<br /><br />Hey Rhia!<br /><br />Nice to see you stopping by. Yep, revenge has its satisfying elements. But as we all know, like most things in this world, they are temporary and largely illusory.<br /><br />But that is part of what makes them fun, isn't it?Diohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14266713613721430111noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2265659668411443893.post-69161537866861263432009-10-09T09:49:55.433-07:002009-10-09T09:49:55.433-07:00I'll echo HBA's comments, and add that I a...I'll echo HBA's comments, and add that I always enjoy an ending that involves a bullet in an important part of someone's anatomy. Rather like "I, The Jury." Even when you know it's coming, it's still satisfying.Rhianon Jamesonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13627163137265856251noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2265659668411443893.post-54139100227140028362009-10-09T07:52:20.275-07:002009-10-09T07:52:20.275-07:00With regard to Zed's ganny and wife, I was mor...With regard to Zed's ganny and wife, I was more meaning that I liked how you made him more human and less cardboard target. In two short sentences he transformed from a bushwhacking bastard I wanted to see dead to a real man with people who would mourn his loss. Skillfull done!HeadBurro Antfarmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10855762117761362578noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2265659668411443893.post-90774475394906870152009-10-09T06:41:28.474-07:002009-10-09T06:41:28.474-07:00Thanks Hon,
I really enjoyed cranking out this on...Thanks Hon,<br /><br />I really enjoyed cranking out this one, which is a brand new piece added to flesh out this story a bit. Doing it yesterday was sort of a little birthday present to myself. <br /><br />Glad you liked the notion of the poor ol grey-haired granny. Everyone needs someone somewhere to shed some tears for them, so I thought it wouldn't be too mawkish of a move.Diohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14266713613721430111noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2265659668411443893.post-81482927487718837362009-10-09T02:44:17.882-07:002009-10-09T02:44:17.882-07:00Oooo, a lovely touch that, giving him a family and...Oooo, a lovely touch that, giving him a family and hopes and dreams... well written my friend! And pacy to - I loved the speed at which it unfurled - I'm loving this tale more and more with each chapter :-DHeadBurro Antfarmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10855762117761362578noreply@blogger.com